Although I agree with Konnikova up to a point, I cannot accept her overriding assumption that interpersonal relationships cannot be developed over a virtual platform.

My thesis statement does present a clear argument, stating what my essay is going to be about, and the side I am choosing to argue as well. This thesis is written in a present voice, but I feel as if the language can be more specific rather than being this general. In order to strengthen my thesis, I can also use Chen and clearly state her opinion as I have Konnikova’s to bring in the other side of the argument and strengthen the thesis further. I can do this by creating another sentence stating that Chen claims interpersonal relationships can be developed over virtual platforms, and from there relate my evidence back to that statement to help prove my argument further.